FIC: TwilightZone, Fraser/Kowalski, R

[pir8fancier.livejournal.com]

Title: TwilightZone
Author: pir8fancier
Rating: R
Warning: slash, m/m
Pairing: Fraser/Kowalski
Disclaimer: Not making any money. Ever.
Summary: Fraser hands Ray yet another one-way ticket to the Twilight Zone.
Author's Notes: Much love and many thanks to my beta, zeldaohzelda.

Twilight Zone

Comments

[j-s-cavalcante.livejournal.com]

Commenting here because the story is off-LJ. It's a total romp. So much fun!! I thought the Ray-voice was refreshingly different. Loved the club of people with horrible Hollywood names, and the RCWT, and everything. I loved Ray's ruminations on being straight--or maybe not so much--and "it's who you love and not what you love," and all of it. There are lots of quotable lines, but I don't have time to put them in here. Still, if I don't leave feedback now it'll be days before I get to it.

The argument was poignant and believable. Fraser would fight politely and passive-aggressively--up to the point where he socks you. So it was perfectly executed. The scene where Fraser sobbed was also believable and wrenching, and this is something I'd normally think would be really hard to keep in character, but you did it. It worked. Again, it was great fun, and thanks for sharing it.

[pir8fancier.livejournal.com]

Thanks! Sometimes I think I've got one foot in the Twilight Zone myself.

Fraser would fight politely and passive-aggressively--up to the point where he socks you.

Which in my mind really devastates Ray when it happens because Ray's propensity to violence is so automatic that if he hits you, it's not so much a big deal as, well, that's Ray. But when Fraser pops you, it's serious mojo. At least, that's the way I look at it.

Much appreciate the feedback!

[(Anonymous)]

Which in my mind really devastates Ray when it happens because Ray's propensity to violence is so automatic that if he hits you, it's not so much a big deal as, well, that's Ray. But when Fraser pops you, it's serious mojo. At least, that's the way I look at it.

Yes! I agree completely. Goading Ray is child's play. If you can goad Fraser to the point of striking you, you'd better have your running shoes on. *shudders*

[j-s-cavalcante.livejournal.com]

Oops, sorry. That was I. :)

[dewey3067.livejournal.com]

Really enjoyed this. Great Ray voice and, yeah, I could see Fraser being just that clueless about women and himself. *g*

[pir8fancier.livejournal.com]

I find his naievete exceptionally endearing. As does Ray.

[cloudiecat.livejournal.com]

I just loved this fic - such a great mix of humour and angst. Fantastic Ray voice showing us a Ray with an abundance of 'tude while still being very emotionally vulnerable. I really liked this Ray - he totally cracked me up and had me wanting to hug him (usually at the same time) throughout the story.

Loved Ray listening with half a brain thing '..eat?', '...date?' - just ..ROFL!!

and

"Isn't it a gorgeous day, Ray?"
"Yeah, something really picturesque about sleet, Frase."

and

"RCWT' which Ray can hardly believe and Fraser is oblivious to - and the similarities you create between Ray and Joanie are just hilarious - and then Ray trying to get through to Fraser about what's really going on.

Love the Ray/Fraser snark - you've really got a handle on it. Also loved Joanie and Clarke as your OC's - wouldn't mind seeing more of them with Ray & Fraser in another story(hint, hint).

There are lots more fave pieces from this story but I'd run out of room:) Just wanted to say how glad I am that you've written another DS fic and hoped you're hooked enough on the boys that you'll be writing some more. 'Cause your stuff is fun and such a pleasure to read. More please:)

[pir8fancier.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much. I wasn't sure how much I could push the similiarities and make it work, but I thought, hey, go for it. There's always this sense for me that Fraser exists a little bit in the nether world: his father's ghost, his ability to "talk" to Dief. And that Ray gets pulled into that against his will.

More Joanie and Clark, will have to think about that. Perhaps a camping trip with the four of them. God, that could be HILARIOUS!

[cloudiecat.livejournal.com]

Oh yeah! Ray and Joanie complaing about their allergy rash and Fraser and Clark being annoying practical outdoorsy types - I can imagine the fun you would have with this scenario. Do it! Do it!!! ... you know you want to *eg*

[indywind]

This is great! well-balanced between humor & angst, characters acting like themselves.

[pir8fancier.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[jeia-moore.livejournal.com]

Oh, I'm so glad you've written another DS fic, I hoped you would! (and you know, if you feel the need to write any more... :-) ).

Love both your Ray and Fraser voices, and the RCWT *hee!* and the way you managed to show their familiarity with each other (Ray learning to half tune Fraser out, and the "Tells" of Fraser that Ray notices) was just lovely. Plus great last line! *LOL*

[pir8fancier.livejournal.com]

I've got a couple of more ideas...

I am not done with these boys yet!

[ruthless1.livejournal.com]

I commented on the noticeboard but I wanted to commnet here too. What an excellent story! Have you still not seen any of the show? Because your voicing is so accurate - I can actually hear Ray saying this stuff in my head. I especially loved Fraser's breakdown - particularly the line about parts of Fraser were flying all over the room. The sex was so tender too (and hot)! I hope you keep writing in ds.
*runs off to read your other ds fic*

[pir8fancier.livejournal.com]

Um, no, I've never seen it. But I've read story after story after story, and at a certain point the fanon assumes a life of its own. It's almost like you're writing canon of fanon. The other story is in Fraser's POV. Interesting to see if you like it as much. That was my first attempt to nail these two down.

[ruthless1.livejournal.com]

Well this one at least is a mighty fine attempt!