New dS story posted

[stormheller.livejournal.com]

Well, new to the web, anyway.

First Person Imperfect

What if Fraser had met Ray Kowalski when he first came to Chicago?

First times, missing scene from the Pilot. Nominated for Huggy Award for Best Zine Story 2003. First published in Duet 2 from Duet Press, Slash, NC-17, 9,200 words, Written Fall 2001

Fire bad, tree pretty, feedback good.

 

Comments

[axiom_of_stripe]

yay! i still love this story tremendously!

[stormheller.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I can still quote your "bra strap" line from memory. We always meant to do a Duet 3, but now we're all about the Rodney and John love so maybe a different duet...

Happy New Year
~ Gina / Stormy

[spainja.livejournal.com]

Oh, I liked that. A lot.

I liked your version of Fraser--rather different that the interpretation you usually see in fic, but it still works, and I think fits well with the Fraser we see in the Pilot.

I loved the condoms. Again, it's a element you don't see much in fic--or at least not described in this much detail. I'm not one who believes that all fictional sex must be safe sex, but it's a refreshing change to see the issue addressed occasionally. Plus I think I learned a few things...

[stormheller.livejournal.com]

Thanks for saying so. I wanted to see RayK interact with pre-Chicago Fraser. I wanted Fraser to think he was fitting in when he really didn't have a clue yet.
I was in a condom store in the 80s and had to ask why they were selling dental damns. Hmmm. Research good.
Thanks for writing.
~ S.

[j-s-cavalcante.livejournal.com]

Thanks for putting this online. I really enjoyed it. It's hot, your Ray is wonderful, and the Fraser interpretation is refreshingly different. And it's certainly a justifiable interpretation. I love how Ray's prediction about how they'll meet again comes true. :)

J S

[stormheller.livejournal.com]

One of the many things I liked about dS is the way Fraser developed as a character over the course of the show. In the pilot, he was stilted and over-confident. I wanted to have that Fraser interacting with a version of RayK that I extrapolated (backwards) as being what RayK would have been 2 years before we first meet him. Well, it seemed like a good idea at the time. ::g::
Thanks for commenting.
~ Stormy

[j-s-cavalcante.livejournal.com]

I think you're right. Fraser was also much less innocent in the first incarnation of the series. It was very clearly shown that his apparent naivete was mostly an act. Even later, with RayK, once in a while that not-so-pure Fraser peeks out. For example, when he slams Orsini with the car door, or when he plays Denny Scarpa to find out what she's really after.

As for Fraser and RayK both being into guys? You can make an excellent case for that; both of them exhibit behavior that isn't "normal" for two guys who are totally straight. Nobody here probably needs me to give examples. :)

J S

[missapocalyptic.livejournal.com]

I agree with j_s_cavalcante, the ending is wondeful.

First I had big trouble believing that the Fraser you were describing was really our Fraser, but the more I read, the more it worked.

[stormheller.livejournal.com]

Well, AUs... (Stormy hides behind AU excuse.)

I'm glad you liked the ending. It makes it all come together.

Thanks for commenting.
~ Stormy

[bibliokat.livejournal.com]

Wow. I'm so glad you put this online.

It's such a different approach to Fraser than what I usually read, but just as good. I especially adore the ending;)

[stormheller.livejournal.com]

I liked the idea of first-season Fraser interacting with RayK.
Thank you kindly.
~ Stormy in Toronto!